poemranker ::In My Minds Eye by daveslady

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Free verse № 93329

In My Minds Eye

Member since 2004 · Posted 3 Mar 2004 · 4 comments

I can see in briliant color. I see the ocean crashing into the rock on the side of a lush green mountian. As i sit on the top of a hill, I listen to that oh, so soothing sound of water My mother is with me, just her and I... I cant help but break the silence, and ask her what heaven is like. Her answer was a gift, wrapped so perfectly... I dont dare open it. She urges me with her eyes and smile, the gift she gives is her gift of love. I am overwhelmed with the brilliant light radiating from the box I rise to my feet, as does she. We embrace with tear filled eyes. Not a word is said while we stand, locked in each others arms I dont want it to end I havent felt her warm embrace for a year. After a moment or two she slowly lets go. I look at her with wondering eyes... Why does she have to go? Why must this moment end? A single tear runs down her check as she turns away. I watch the figure as it goes down the hill. Now i stand alone just me and the box. The box that is filled with the love of a mother for her daughter I keep that box close to my heart. Some day i will see her again, only this time it will never end.

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4 comments

[10] wilco 3-Mar-04/3:12 PM Reply
Very emotional....and for that....a 10
[10] deleted user 4-Mar-04/10:40 PM Reply
Very touching... emotional, really enjoyable
[7] zodiac 5-Mar-04/4:15 AM Reply
If any of you at all seemed even halfway open to real critical comments, this site probably wouldn't be such a depressing, soul-blackening mindfuck. Don't you think?
[10] ga_writer 7-Mar-04/9:48 PM Reply
This one is even greater. I'm sorry you lost your mother. This poem shows how much you love her still. You've done a great job of showing how much she has meant to you!!