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In My Minds Eye (Free verse) by daveslady

I can see in briliant color. I see the ocean crashing into the rock on the side of a lush green mountian. As i sit on the top of a hill, I listen to that oh, so soothing sound of water My mother is with me, just her and I... I cant help but break the silence, and ask her what heaven is like. Her answer was a gift, wrapped so perfectly... I dont dare open it. She urges me with her eyes and smile, the gift she gives is her gift of love. I am overwhelmed with the brilliant light radiating from the box I rise to my feet, as does she. We embrace with tear filled eyes. Not a word is said while we stand, locked in each others arms I dont want it to end I havent felt her warm embrace for a year. After a moment or two she slowly lets go. I look at her with wondering eyes... Why does she have to go? Why must this moment end? A single tear runs down her check as she turns away. I watch the figure as it goes down the hill. Now i stand alone just me and the box. The box that is filled with the love of a mother for her daughter I keep that box close to my heart. Some day i will see her again, only this time it will never end.

zodiac 5-Mar-04/4:15 AM
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