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Free verse № 91379

The Niche

Member since 2003 · Posted 22 Feb 2004 · 3 comments

There is fear about woodwork and nighttime. They are so unevenly connected. You cut off your arms to make it better, you say, I am plain, this way I can be better. I open up the freezer door. There is chopped up meat inside hanging from the rafters, hacked and frozen. I am trying to figure out what to make for dinner tonight. I will be better if I can make dinner. For once, if everything goes where it is supposed to, I will be satisfied. I will be satiated and full. This goes here, and your arms go back to your body, they will go back, at least when you die.

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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 23-Feb-04/12:51 AM Reply
A masterpiece from the "so incoherent it must be beautiful" school. -bow'ls-
[7] richa 23-Feb-04/1:23 PM Reply
I think the comparison between woodwork and nightmare needs to be more elaborate.

If it works it would be ace, but at the moment I am not getting it.
[8] Shuushin 23-Feb-04/6:25 PM Reply
something with less finality at the end I think would do wonders for this. Something more poignant.

I like the use of repetition.