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Rinse (Free verse) by somemorepoetry
Cups slick-shined, Sinking in the soap, With wrinkled hands, Holding and splashing Beneath the faucet, Leaking and dripping Hot water like this Moment was a ripple And nothing that happens now Will ever flow upstream to Catch us offguard With our gloves off Reaching for Shards of glass With scalded hands Through rose-red water, Spreading and melding. Still you smile, Then grimace, As you grab hold and pull Breaking for the surface. Broken glass and rose-red water Are merely momentary lapses. You must wash those dishes.

Up the ladder: Hair
Down the ladder: Goodbye Sad Door

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.857143
Weighted score: 5.230521
Overall Rank: 4242
Posted: February 19, 2004 6:58 PM PST; Last modified: February 19, 2004 6:58 PM PST
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Comments:
[1] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.177 | 19-Feb-04/7:14 PM | Reply
This poem made me remember how excellent I am.
[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 19-Feb-04/7:36 PM | Reply
Not as bad, I think, as the scores you have thus far.

I will total them and add one for good luck. eight.
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