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Black Snake (Concrete) by Butterflywriter
Bright lights,
Lots of noise,
Ground shaking,
Sun baking.
The lights getting brighter,
The noise getting louder,
The endless snake rushes by,
Glistening in the baked sun.
Wind pushes me away,
I sit there and stare as the serpent
Goes on forever, finally an end.
And no more wind.
All is quiet,
Sun is hot, ground is still, and on I go.
Suddenly, more shaking, more noise,
No time to get out of the way.
I look towards the sun,
It burns my eyes,
No more time for I am to die.
âPlease keep me safe, lordâ
I pray in my last seconds.
The last thing I know,
I look to see my death
Staring me in the face and
Charging at me.
This time there was no wind
To push me away,
Good-B---------
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.1430435
Overall Rank: 5421
Posted: February 12, 2004 5:43 PM PST; Last modified: February 12, 2004 5:43 PM PST
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Good-B------- is one of the silliest things done in poetry ever ever ever ever ever ever ever. I imagine you performing this, accompanying yourself with a dramatic reenactment. It would be fucking hilarious.