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Follow The Rainbow (Free verse) by forestchild7
Watching you sleep,
as I dream of us;
The possibility is overwhelming,
and I don't know what to do anymore;
They've taken you away from me,
and I can only imagine what it would be like now;
Somewhere, out in the darkness,
she responds to my plea,
and I know I have a chance,
even if only once in this lifetime;
It's not what you think,
because you know me better than that;
These gilded bars are now peeling,
and I have seen through the lies holding me back;
You shall be free,
and we shall be together as foreordained;
Your love shall blossom as the rose,
and we shall have eternity to do as we choose;
I have loved you long,
and can not wait for you to be back in my life;
So follow the rainbow,
and I shall be waiting at the other end...
***Written May 8th, 2002***
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10032
Posted: August 13, 2002 7:26 PM PDT; Last modified: August 13, 2002 7:26 PM PDT
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some pruning and tightening up, endline repair,
and pruning. It is jagged to read, needs a smoother flow to do justice to your thoughts.