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Follow The Rainbow (Free verse) by forestchild7

Watching you sleep, as I dream of us; The possibility is overwhelming, and I don't know what to do anymore; They've taken you away from me, and I can only imagine what it would be like now; Somewhere, out in the darkness, she responds to my plea, and I know I have a chance, even if only once in this lifetime; It's not what you think, because you know me better than that; These gilded bars are now peeling, and I have seen through the lies holding me back; You shall be free, and we shall be together as foreordained; Your love shall blossom as the rose, and we shall have eternity to do as we choose; I have loved you long, and can not wait for you to be back in my life; So follow the rainbow, and I shall be waiting at the other end... ***Written May 8th, 2002***

Sisterwolf 28-Dec-05/6:56 PM
Lots of love here. I think it would do well with
some pruning and tightening up, endline repair,
and pruning. It is jagged to read, needs a smoother flow to do justice to your thoughts.




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