Notes toward a possible poem

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Feb 2004 · 9 comments

attempting to think: exploration of assumptions declaration of elation readmission of devotion revelation of defection devolution of confusion recognition of competition this is constant noise mindless thinking precludes thought but leads to: transcendence? not fucking likely in my lifetime

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[n/a] Lenore 4-Feb-04/9:26 AM Reply

Suck factor- 10

[9] horus8 › Lenore 4-Feb-04/11:30 AM Reply

Hey, we can't help it if you live in a world full of dick mouth? I'd suggest, recognizing the fact, your poetry will never compete with this mans. how you dance around pretending that your opinion is based on talent, or wicca, or a mouthful of cock, is intriguing, but in the end, if you put your poems next to his? You'd be just another shitty new england writer, not that you aren't a fucking steaming mullosk already. Yeah, that's right cunt, I got your number now. fifty years of having me climb up your ass and remind you that I don't care for you at all, and in fact, I never did. that's why it's going to be such a pleasure reviewing everything you do for the rest of your days.

[9] horus8 4-Feb-04/11:22 AM Reply

You will always be one of my favourites.

[2] zodiac 5-Feb-04/4:56 AM Reply

man my girlfriends like such a big ho /
so i killed her (feel bad for it, though!) /
yeah it banged up her flesh, /
but the body's still fresh - /
if you're tempted, do give 'er a go! /

[5] Goad 5-Feb-04/6:47 AM Reply

As he works up his lit'r'y extrusions,
Nick poeticisms all but a few shuns.
But his substandard rank
Is proof those who would wank
Should stick to their real life protrusions.

[2] zodiac › Goad 5-Feb-04/6:56 AM Reply

"all but a few shuns" is inspired. Have an Aventinus and pommes klein on me.

[8] richa 5-Feb-04/8:53 AM Reply

last 4 lines are hard to read, the rest is fine. Certainly a classier poem about poetry.

[n/a] Nicholas Jones › richa 6-Feb-04/6:57 AM Reply

It isn't supposed to be easy. But I'm glad you liked it.

[6] NanceXToo 5-Feb-04/2:08 PM Reply

not bad..heh funny last line.