poemranker ::mythical by SupremeDreamer

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Free verse № 84395

mythical

Member since 2003 · Posted 1 Feb 2004 · Edited 1 Feb 2004 · 3 comments

mythical thats this world in a nutshell or another insane explaination which has meaning only to me. There's a point in time where reality became what it is now; a dream that attained substance somehow, sometime before my eyes formed before I could breathe air and before color could reach my cornea. There's a day where I could create and be the one who moves the stars; it was before time and space unfolded over the darkness before there was light. I wrote destiny when awakening and have changed it before learning to crawl upon tiled floors. But all this explains nothing forever remaining to alien eyes mythical.

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[9] Sam 3-Feb-04/12:11 AM Reply
Love it when somebody else like me tries to embrace the mysteries of being!
[5] NanceXToo 5-Feb-04/1:04 PM Reply
This seems to be going back and forth too much between past and present tense. It could also use some cleaning up (typos and incorrectly spelled words etc.) I like "and before color could reach my cornea" and "before learning to crawl upon tiled floors." Those are the only lines that really stand out to me as 'strong' lines.
[10] Stephen Robins 9-Feb-04/7:46 AM Reply
Not only is this poem unutterable tosh the conversation between SupremeDreamer and Rockmage is the worst in this sites history