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mythical (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

mythical thats this world in a nutshell or another insane explaination which has meaning only to me. There's a point in time where reality became what it is now; a dream that attained substance somehow, sometime before my eyes formed before I could breathe air and before color could reach my cornea. There's a day where I could create and be the one who moves the stars; it was before time and space unfolded over the darkness before there was light. I wrote destiny when awakening and have changed it before learning to crawl upon tiled floors. But all this explains nothing forever remaining to alien eyes mythical.

NanceXToo 5-Feb-04/1:04 PM
This seems to be going back and forth too much between past and present tense. It could also use some cleaning up (typos and incorrectly spelled words etc.) I like "and before color could reach my cornea" and "before learning to crawl upon tiled floors." Those are the only lines that really stand out to me as 'strong' lines.




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