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Unhearted (Lyric) by Miggy I canât force whatâs between us
Nor figure if love is inside
But baby we could only trust
What our hearts are trying to hide
No matter how much I know
Couldnât get a degree in romance
So we must let everything go
Cause weâre together as one big chance
(Chorus)
I can never become cupid
Even though I always try
Having you isnât an idea stupid
Only a possibility in life
No control of whatâs at stake
Just a risk that we must take
Voices you hear are very simple
Telling to get out while you can
Not like I can live without you here
And Iâm not some kind of quick sand
Our goals are too fast to chase
We always pull each other backwards
Canât blame you if you push me away
For I wanted just to be a loving factor
(Chorus)
With all this time
Canât tell the difference
Between our love
Between ourselves
Reality has crashed down
Been blown to separate worlds
Always end up together somehow
Everlasting like a shining pearl
(Chorus/Ending)
Up the ladder:
Help The Aged
Down the ladder:
Wanted You To Know
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Posted: January 31, 2004 6:53 PM PST; Last modified: January 31, 2004 6:53 PM PSTWeighted score: 7.055193 Overall Rank: 25 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215
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1-Feb-04/4:13 AM
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A weeping chuff of dignity. -10-
The cool thing about selling lyrics to boy-bands would be to make the first letters of each line spell something like "WE ALL WORSHIP SATAN - AND WE'RE GAY". Then when the song was released you could point it out to all your friends.
Unhearted isn't a word. I can't tell if you knew that.
This isn't bad...lyric wise. I mean, i can kinda 'hear' it as a song. As a poem I'd consider it more lacking. Anyway, my only major suggestion to you is to revise your chorus because the line with the phrase "an idea stupid" is quite awkward and way too forced a rhyme.
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