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Deceased

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 Aug 2002 · 2 comments

The day became the night, The night became the day, The birds, the birds, They sang, Somewhere far away, An angel tried to scream, Help, help, She cried, But no-one else would hear, Far too far away, The clouds, the clouds, Went dark, I never will forget, The day that angel cried, Now hark, now hark, Deceased.

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[3] horus8 17-Apr-03/6:05 PM Reply
Now hark, lark! bef're it's dark and your tail feather's bark turns into Noah's ark and we leave a mark of animal shit that will eventually nark us out to sweet jesu'. did i mention being stark fucking nude dude? well that too, buddy.
[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom 18-Apr-03/12:43 PM Reply
Sounds alot like something Mr.Pig wrote that I liked. -8-