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Make Love to Me (Free verse) by drumrgirl30 Make Love to Me
with more than
just lips and hands.
Make Love to Me
as should be
between a woman
and a man.
Put heart and soul
within your touch
bring out the feelings
I want to share
so much.
I want to feel more
than just skin
bring forth the fires
that burn within.
Make Love to Me
so i may feel like a
woman, whole.
Make Love to Me
with body, heart & soul!
Up the ladder:
Mango Pickle
Down the ladder:
Smoky Mountain High
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Posted: January 25, 2004 11:42 AM PST; Last modified: January 25, 2004 11:42 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.2689414 Overall Rank: 3854 Comments:
I LOVE it, I'm only giving you a 9 cuz I wish I wrote it
thank-you very much :)
superb! give u an A++ :)
thank-you..now if only you had been my Lit. teacher when i was in school ;)
No no no. Wasn't this copied off the back of a Shania Twain album?
no...but if you find it on one of her albums please let me know so i can contact her about royalties..lol
I would do if you didnt look like an ape?
Just kidding 9/10
nope..i dont look like an ape..i'm bald & have buck teeth...LOL (j/k)..thanks ;)
"body, heart & soul"???
come on, i know you know that this has got to be the worlds most cliche word combo don't you know this??? ugh, this is putrid
yes, i know :)
Omit "so much" from Verse 3 and this is pretty good.
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