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sex in the city/sex in the country (Free verse) by tralala42001
by now i have developed pictures of women torn in between by blanket hands singing the nightly death of lost sons and graveyard husbands who cheat on their own corpse with handfuls of loose dirt tombstone etchings like the faded green numbers on the loose flesh of your forearm social security wrapping each digit like the worms of inheritance asking for whore money out of your poor sickly pants, cum stained and faded like a sidewalk cracked like teeth, smiling like a building -son of dad

Up the ladder: Daddy's Little Girl
Down the ladder: Thunder

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.375
Weighted score: 5.3697944
Overall Rank: 3263
Posted: January 17, 2004 3:37 PM PST; Last modified: January 17, 2004 3:37 PM PST
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[7] titan69 @ 62.31.23.137 | 18-Jan-04/1:06 AM | Reply
what a strange world you live in???
[8] richa @ 81.178.214.93 | 18-Jan-04/5:22 AM | Reply
The first 3/4 verses are good, the end just degenerates.
[4] zodiac @ 67.240.192.208 | 18-Jan-04/8:46 PM | Reply
Son of dad is the only good part. Do you mind if I steal it for a garage-band name?
[n/a] tralala42001 @ 67.123.225.225 | 24-Jan-04/11:24 AM | Reply
this is for zosiac: the name for that band already exist
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > tralala42001 | 24-Jan-04/11:27 AM | Reply
Which band took it?
[n/a] tralala42001 @ 67.123.225.225 | 24-Jan-04/11:25 AM | Reply
sorry i meant zodiac (sorry for the mispelling)
[n/a] tralala42001 @ 67.123.225.225 | 24-Jan-04/12:25 PM | Reply
that name (son of dad) is already taken by the craziest awesomest most turbolest batmanest kickassest super turbo posted upness band around!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > tralala42001 | 24-Jan-04/12:27 PM | Reply
Yeah, but what band is it?
[n/a] tralala42001 @ 67.123.225.225 | 24-Jan-04/12:52 PM | Reply
the band IS "Son Of Dad" (from Los Angeles)
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > tralala42001 | 24-Jan-04/1:00 PM | Reply
Then why did they take it, if they were already called that?

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