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Baggage (Free verse) by darkshark
The train will clock in
At three again today.
You'll probably tip your hat
To visitors and the holidays
That bring so many people
So far from home.
My head hurts.
No other way to put it
Besides in a hat
With the brim pulled down,
So the sun stays out of my eyes
And I can get some work done.
We toss them on the ground
Like they are just burdens
That we must carry on and off a train
Before we can go home.
They grab them and smile,
Never to think anything of us
Beyond our striped shirts
And tipped hats.
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5886
Posted: January 5, 2004 5:50 PM PST; Last modified: March 24, 2004 7:37 PM PST
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First two verses are the best, the wordplay of 'tip your hat to visitors and the holidays' and also 'no other way to put it/ except in a hat'