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the gods of rook and man (Free verse) by richa
somewhere, in the heaven of a heaven and typing; the completed works of robert browning am I and this sight; 'a man in a labyrinth -- of walls, pale green on a dominant grey'. The sleight wind shaken clean of its grits, having shaped the stone walls, has died and, should the flat door of the skies come down to rest on these walls it would seal like the lid on a jam jar. The man in the labyrinth weighs poles in half steps north or south, he flusters like a flare, on a busy ocean of angles. 'The rook does not flinch from its grip on the sycamore stripped, of leaves and flanked by two blades of the sun.' says the god of all rooks, sat at a table playing chess with the god of all men. in moves they argue a thousand paths.

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.2
Weighted score: 5.5006523
Overall Rank: 2679
Posted: December 23, 2003 7:19 AM PST; Last modified: December 23, 2003 7:19 AM PST
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[9] fair12 @ 66.84.225.2 | 23-Dec-03/2:10 PM | Reply
I think this is beautiful - but, some of the line splits through me a little and I had to read them a few times - tighten it a bit and it will be perfect. I give you a 9 - 10 when it's revamped. Send this out - it's worthy....
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 23-Dec-03/2:37 PM | Reply
Did I ever tell you about the time that I ate a quarter pound of ass in return for an all year pass to loom world?
[n/a] richa @ 81.178.252.106 > horus8 | 23-Dec-03/2:45 PM | Reply
A quarter pound of ass AND a years pass to loom world?
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 > richa | 23-Dec-03/2:56 PM | Reply
Yes, yes, a plate full of booty. For a trip to see where things get loomed. Exciting, huh? It's in Milan.
[9] Ranger @ 86.140.66.243 | 21-Jan-07/3:24 AM | Reply
Yes.

Punctuate the final line?
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