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Free verse № 75922

iron coil

Member since 2003 · Posted 18 Nov 2003 · 4 comments

now dead, or so you said, its ok my nemesis. choked me silly -the sound of gasps made you smile. Iron coil burn and boil put me under the soil and suck off the last drop of oil You will celebrate this day its tradition, and another way to gloat. make a profit, a liar with a dental plan and blank fingerprints tell the grandkiddies all about sucking me dry, and taking them to college after repeating my last words Iron coil burn and boil put me under the soil and suck off the last drop of oil what a shitty bedtime story give them nightmares ole buddy.

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[10] Shuushin 18-Nov-03/7:02 PM Reply
A supreme effort.

Very much liked.

;O]

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[n/a] Shit-Crumpets › Shuushin 18-Nov-03/7:06 PM Reply
no, i didnt try at all.
just needed to post something.
[9] horus8 18-Nov-03/7:24 PM Reply
I liked it.
[7] little_big_nose 3-Feb-05/5:57 AM Reply
I don't think you meant for this to be a great poem, but I'm under the impression it means something speical to you