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I Can't Believe You (Free verse) by Katzclear
Best friends.. perhaps more I've told you all emotion You told me you felt the same way I gave you my devotion Not an inch did I stray Not a thought against you With you I stayed My bond remained true Little hints of affection placed in my ear Headed in good direction I felt you so near We did everything together Everything or nothing at all I had no doubt whether all problems we could resolve In a single moment A single day I must now lament Why must it be this way? As soon as you heard word That another found you amusing Your actions absurd I found myself losing You left my that day And took with you my soul You are no longer to stay I am no longer whole You've known me for long And her perhaps half a night I know you're so wrong Your thoughts are not right You think that you love her but that can't be so There was no times for emotion to stir What you did to me was low Willing to risk my friendship and love Merely for an exciting twist I know not what you were thinking of But I am not going to accept this What I'd wanted from you was good I could have given you much in return I thought that you had understood But love I guess you haven't learned It isn't about how pretty she is or popular in she is in her school It's what we had, and that isn't this I can't believe you were such a fool.

Up the ladder: Subtle Reasons
Down the ladder: We Have Never Spoken

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8
Weighted score: 5.095362
Overall Rank: 6133
Posted: November 17, 2003 2:47 PM PST; Last modified: November 17, 2003 2:47 PM PST
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Comments:
[10] sliver @ 63.190.80.132 | 17-Nov-03/2:54 PM | Reply
We men can be like that sometimes. He will realize what he missed. Perhaps by then you will find happiness again.
[n/a] Katzclear @ 12.222.55.183 > sliver | 17-Nov-03/2:57 PM | Reply
I wish I wasn't so stupid to do everything with him... Now I have to start all over and find new friends and crap. He met a girl at a party.. never said ANYTHING till one of her friends said she liked him... it was really stupid.
[10] sliver @ 63.190.80.132 > Katzclear | 17-Nov-03/2:59 PM | Reply
I'm sure you won't have any problems making new friends. I don't really know ya, but you seem nice enough.
[7] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 17-Nov-03/3:50 PM | Reply
There are mistake in the last stanza L2, and S7 L1
[n/a] Katzclear @ 12.222.55.183 > horus8 | 17-Nov-03/3:54 PM | Reply
Yes I know, I caught that too. But since you knew it was a mistake.. I hope you know what it was supposed to be :)
[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139 > horus8 | 17-Nov-03/4:33 PM | Reply
There's no middle ground with you is there? You're either WOT or STOP.
[8] ShaNoN+960317485 @ 199.40.206.3 | 17-Nov-03/7:50 PM | Reply
Well lads this looks to me like a gay friend & nothing more, losing out to a girl:o)
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