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Hidden (Lyric) by Miggy
I can’t even close my eyes Without bringing back all the lies Every time I take a breath See another expression of myself And with no more self-control I sink deeper in the bottomless hole (Chorus) I can’t stop this daily sin Every moment it will begin So I stay hidden, hidden from you Never ever going to tell the truth It’s my only recourse From this unstoppable force But you still try to see through me My thoughts too forbidden Finding a way to conceal The memories you reveal (Chorus) I hide myself away from you though I never wanted to with all the past we’ve been though cause it breaks us apart When I’m not gone afar Problems we never resolve (Chorus/End)

Up the ladder: Holding You

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.25
Weighted score: 6.9817934
Overall Rank: 109
Posted: November 17, 2003 11:23 AM PST; Last modified: November 17, 2003 11:23 AM PST
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[7] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.51 | 17-Nov-03/1:54 PM | Reply
A lyric.

I think a bridge with more detail about this dirty little secret would be in order.

as it stands there are some nice bits, but it needs something more.
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[9] sliver @ 63.190.80.132 | 17-Nov-03/3:22 PM | Reply
Not Bad at all, maybe more would be in order?
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 17-Nov-03/4:03 PM | Reply
"Every moment it will begin" any moment...


"with all the past we’ve been though" through

"When I’m not gone afar
Problems we never resolve" And this just makes no sense.
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