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Hidden (Lyric) by Miggy I canât even close my eyes
Without bringing back all the lies
Every time I take a breath
See another expression of myself
And with no more self-control
I sink deeper in the bottomless hole
(Chorus)
I canât stop this daily sin
Every moment it will begin
So I stay hidden, hidden from you
Never ever going to tell the truth
Itâs my only recourse
From this unstoppable force
But you still try to see through me
My thoughts too forbidden
Finding a way to conceal
The memories you reveal
(Chorus)
I hide myself away from you
though I never wanted to
with all the past weâve been though
cause it breaks us apart
When Iâm not gone afar
Problems we never resolve
(Chorus/End)
Up the ladder:
my hunger has become a hunger for revenge
Down the ladder:
Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad.
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.25
Posted: November 17, 2003 11:23 AM PST; Last modified: November 17, 2003 11:23 AM PSTWeighted score: 6.9817934 Overall Rank: 110 Comments:
Not Bad at all, maybe more would be in order?
"Every moment it will begin" any moment...
"with all the past weâve been though" through "When Iâm not gone afar Problems we never resolve" And this just makes no sense. 531 view(s)
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I think a bridge with more detail about this dirty little secret would be in order.
as it stands there are some nice bits, but it needs something more.
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