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You love it. (Free verse) by skaskowski
part one: handy handled tennis racquet bread dangles from strings an air mattress swings part two: connection of all nouns with verbs and prepositions under the bread jumps over the racquet etc. part three: odd plot twist, paradoxical climax. fiber defeats fighter. collapse on the bed and relax. part four: smooth ending. recede into dreaming. falling asleep at the wheel leads to literary mass-appeal.

Up the ladder: Desire
Down the ladder: The Voice

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.1666665
Weighted score: 5.0448236
Overall Rank: 7009
Posted: November 14, 2003 10:11 AM PST; Last modified: November 14, 2003 10:12 AM PST
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[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 15-Nov-03/12:20 AM | Reply
I don't hate it. It's got a fresh format too.

I almost hate the last part, but the others are so good I'm willing to live with it.

and if the "love" in the title has anything to do with tennis scorings, I will re-visit this with a ONE.


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[n/a] skaskowski @ 216.125.247.11 > Shuushin | 17-Nov-03/2:32 PM | Reply
hahaha i didnt even think about that! i mean, i'm clever.
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