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You Left Your Brownies (Free verse) by Freethinker1602
This happiness beyond comparison Sprung from a night of passion So fulfilling I can barely contain my joy I smile sweetly when the memories Twist inside me I want to kiss you again Before I wake in a world gone mad. For when I lay here with you time ceases. And the sun doesn’t rise, Until you leave. Then reality sinks in, and I Must conquer the greater evils That grow with time. So kiss me one last time Before you leave so I can enjoy These last few moments Of bliss before corruption settles in To taint the day jg

Up the ladder: Poe ét tri
Down the ladder: just am

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.25
Weighted score: 4.910598
Overall Rank: 9596
Posted: November 5, 2003 5:19 PM PST; Last modified: November 19, 2003 7:34 PM PST
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[7] sliver @ 65.178.200.179 | 5-Nov-03/8:10 PM | Reply
And what's with the play on Lucifer? I always expect something satanic from you.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.30.210 > sliver | 8-Nov-03/8:20 AM | Reply
CHECK MY EARLIER POSTINGS... i PUT SOMETHING SATANIC UP EVERY ONCE IN A WHILE NOWADAYS. THE NAME IS MOSTLY THE DETRIMENTAL AFFECT i HAVE ON MOST SITUATIONS AND INDIVIDUALS
[6] Shardik @ 24.126.116.54 | 6-Nov-03/2:01 PM | Reply
Corruption to me, is a slow steady leaky faucet in your bathtub, and a handful of rats turning it into an water park while all are sleeping.
[9] The_Third_Isis @ 24.126.116.54 | 19-Nov-03/10:34 PM | Reply
Lucy..lucy..lucy that spark i enjoy your work in the sky with diamonds..so i'll leave you a lip biting kiss and twoo wellbutrins on your pillow..OMMMMMMMM
[7] savagelymakeitcount @ 220.99.224.11 | 20-Nov-03/4:38 AM | Reply
What's with the brownies?
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 166.94.9.204 > savagelymakeitcount | 20-Nov-03/12:28 PM | Reply
I wrote this after having a good time with him and I was making him brownies just about once a week. He left them because he'd forgotten about them and so had I. I'd hidden them as insentive for his "being a good boy"
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