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Shadows

Member since 2003 · Posted 24 Oct 2003 · 4 comments

Dark shadows fill an empty forest, Empty of people, sounds, life, Dark empty shadows, made only by trees, And those too are withering, Withering to nothing but shadows, Shadows with nothing to disturb them, Nothing but the empty wind, the empty sky, the empty forest, Hollow winds, empty trees, dark forest, Dark shadows with nothing to disturb them

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4 comments

[10] Miggy 24-Oct-03/6:57 PM Reply
This is probably the best of what you wrote so far (10)
[n/a] poetandknowit › Miggy 24-Oct-03/7:12 PM Reply
And Miggy would know!!!!!!!
[7] richa 25-Oct-03/9:19 AM Reply
cute circularity, fascinating like the telletubies
[4] Don-Quixote 27-Oct-03/1:18 AM Reply
4 darks - 5 shadows...

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goddamn, this is a pimple man, the repetition amazing - sizzled me into a micro dust particle within seconds.

why dont you give it a new title? such as:

jiggsaw puzzle.

blessed with 4.