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A History of Truth (Free verse) by Blue Magpie
Jesus declared, beneath a clear blue sky “The truth will set you free.” So why, do we in loving freedom, and perhaps God too, not love the truth, but try instead, creatively, to use it when we lie, and later wonder that so much we love must die. Jesus made Pilot feel uncomfortable, that calm demeanour left him sweating in the hot, dry desert of his understanding. How could the cause of so much trouble be at once both humble and commanding. Brought face to face with such reality he found that keeping harmony was too demanding. Seeking a fulcrum, some escape, some way to stay his fall, he grasps the charged man’s words and asks, “What is truth?”. Walking through the brittle law courts, constantly repapered schools, bazaars and business capers of a planet sized bowel cancer, a busy tourist in my hat and shorts, I wonder, observing all the fools, watching TV, reading the papers, would it be any different if--- Jesus had given him an answer? I mean if Jesus had laid it down for us then and there so that we knew, like we know the time to catch a ferry or a bus, indubitably, for all to see, the view that --- “Truth is a glass of water for the thirsty, the purring of a cat, a plate of beans for the hungry, the chair wherein you’re sat, a kind word and a hug to the lost and lonely, the buzzing of a bug, a smile.” --- would the world be any different? But then I think to myself, he did, I’m sure he did. We, of course, uncouth in the absence of knowledge, believe fiercely in the truth, teach our children that they, unlike us, must tell the truth and convince ourselves that we, having stepped voluntarily off the cliff edge of reality, will only fall a little way, will not suffer any reprimand or, by any fate, be made to pay because we failed to understand. Mahatma Gandhi, holding a country in his strong brown hands, breathed gently into ears that “God is Truth”, and who, in their effrontery could claim he has bequeathed, to callous age as well as tender youth, much less of one than of the other. Buddha, when asked, we hear, replies, facts are not truth, nor tales, nor memories nor even thoughts or written histories, in fact, we’re told he earnestly denies that truth exists at all in browsing herds of well, or often poorly, written words that, like the junk some other owner left behind, clutter-up the unused spaces of our mind. And Lao Tze, I feel, would probably agree, that truth, when all is said and done, can never be caught and tied down or separately caged, it was against such ignorance he raged and taught that truth like God has always been a wonder we must want before its seen and love if we would know and understand. It is the “loving truth” that is so strange and yet if we could just do this each day we soon would realise we loved the world and in so do doing made the world love us. Truth is dynamic, flowing and eternal in seeing this and in accepting change we gain stability, find a new way to live and watch as beauty is unfurled around us with a minimum of fuss. Ralph Waldo Emerson, sitting by a lake alone, but never lonely in his soul, found it quite sad so many others slept while he found so much joy in life awake. In loving truth so well he knew it was a whole seen partially by us because, we are much less than what we seek to see, although we’re still a part of its reality, and this, I think, is what he truly meant when he wrote down, “Truth is our element”. To swim is so much harder than to float or clasp the nearest rock and say that this is now my truth, I will learn it by rote and in so doing seek eternal bliss, but like all skills once truly learned it seems well worth the blessings that are earned. There are more worms than fish more fish than birds, more foolish men than wise, and I, in truth can only wish, that you may find, within your eyes, the light to see the truth behind the words that those who lived in joy have left behind.

Up the ladder: Gone
Down the ladder: Where I'm From

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Posted: October 9, 2003 12:16 AM PDT; Last modified: October 9, 2003 12:16 AM PDT
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[7] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 9-Oct-03/7:17 AM | Reply
you have some desperate misspelling here, my friend. the one that stands out most glaringly is "the Pilot". at first, i thought you were writing a parody. but then i realized that you were referring to Pontius Pilate.

there are some good ideas in here, but your long-winded discourse loses steam before it gets barely started.

[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.42 > <~> | 9-Oct-03/11:45 AM | Reply
Dear Nameless Entity,
thankyou for the correction on Pilate, the only other spelling error I find is the extra r in harassed, a late word change, I would be grateful if you could point the other desperate misspellings.
[7] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > Blue Magpie | 9-Oct-03/12:39 PM | Reply
Dear Blue Magpie,

I apaolgize for my mistaken accusation. I was wrong about the misspellings. I have been a horrible mood today, and you bore the brunt of it.

I stand corrected.
[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.110 > <~> | 9-Oct-03/10:23 PM | Reply
Dear ~
Your apollogy does you credit, no hard feelings, I am not perfect either.
[1] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.227 | 9-Oct-03/7:37 AM | Reply
You have neglected to mention the following important philosophical figures:

a)Joseph Smith
b)Aristotle
c)Shang Tsung
[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.42 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 9-Oct-03/11:52 AM | Reply
While it is hard to take anyone who considers Joseph Smith an important philosophical figure seriously I will reply.

Aristotle may be a fair question, but Socrates would have been a much better one and I did feel I was letting an old lover down in not mentioning him, I may revise for his sake.

If Shang Tsung exists outside of the world of Mortal Combat I would like to know more of him
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.47 > Blue Magpie | 9-Oct-03/4:54 PM | Reply
You SHOULD take Joseph Smith more seriously. If it hadn't been for him, the gold tablets would never have been engraved. Hardly a trivial figure in philosophical history, you must admit.
[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.110 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 9-Oct-03/10:25 PM | Reply
What Golden Tablets? As far as I know they only ever existed in Joseph's imagination, the angel taking them back to heaven is just a cover up, one more lie to top all the others.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.87 > Blue Magpie | 18-Feb-04/12:08 PM | Reply
That is a terrible thing to say. How dare you write about loving the truth whilst simultaneously soiling us in the balms of such a lie? Your claim that the Golden Tablets never existed is laughable, since The Book of Mormon, having been transcribed from said tablets, is irrefutable proof of their existence. You leave me no choice but to give your poeme a -0-
[9] irishfolksuicide @ 81.178.215.114 | 9-Oct-03/7:43 AM | Reply
don't like the rhyming, it seem arbitrary.

Other than that I like it. Reads like a kind of thesis in verse.

Glad you mentioned emerson

So many ace lines, my favourite is' To swim is so much harder than to float or clasp the nearest rock and say that this is now my truth' a nice little half rhyme too.

Not too didactic either which is quite a feat for a poem about truth
[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.42 > irishfolksuicide | 9-Oct-03/11:57 AM | Reply
Hywel,
I am sorry you didn't like the irregularity of the rhyming, it was deliberate,as was the descent from IP on occasions, it is actually easier to write perfect rhymes, at least for me at this stage of my poetic development. I am glad you liked the poem as a whole however.
[7] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.51 | 9-Oct-03/11:32 AM | Reply
For something so long you'd better grab me very tightly fairly early on. I don't feel grabbed.

There's alot of information here, but the credibility of it gets tainted right at the start with statements like "Jesus made Pilot feel uncomfortable".

It sounds like a line made just for the sake of the rhyme (with trouble?). Unforced rhyming and solid information is *extremely* difficult.

Lots of good data, lots of great, interesting names - its just that the vehicle is a bit tedious.

And I will say, the last stanza is mostly superb.

Lastly - much of this is iambic pentameter, so I found myself trying to continue that to the not conforming lines; that makes it hard to get a consistent rythm.

Maybe you could string a couple sonnets together? Extend it by a bit to make a crown?

Good stuff.
[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.42 > Shuushin | 9-Oct-03/12:05 PM | Reply
Hi Suushin,
To take you comments as they come, I am sorry it didn't grab you, this is an experimental write for me, and I do have my audience of choice in mind. Funny you should suggest that the line "Jesus made Pilot feel uncomfortable" might be a forced rhyme, it was in the early drafts as an unrhymed, or unpaired line and I only added the trouble line much later.

Thanks for liking the last stanza. As for the IP, as I said to someone else, I deliberately stepped out of it in order to provide some relief. I fall into it so naturally it takes real effort to write anything of length and not use it, but it does get a bit soporific after a while. That is not to say my efforts worked, just to say what I thought I was trying to do.
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > Blue Magpie | 9-Oct-03/4:37 PM | Reply
Totally understood and I very much appreciate the response to my comments. It is hard to make a fair citique of a poem without being familiar with the poet's body of work - but I figure one approach is to take each at face value.

As for writing IP and something of length, yes - can be a drag. I have a crown of sonnets I've been "working on" for 8 months. 5 sonnets into it, plus skeletons for the remainders, I just look at it now and think, "what a pathetic piece of crap."

Anyway - I do like quite a bit of what you've got here (there is lots of substance), sorry if I appear to focus more on the crits.
[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.110 > Shuushin | 9-Oct-03/10:28 PM | Reply
Dear Shuushin,
No problem on the crits, it is what the poem is here for, there are plenty of sites where they only dish out 'encouragement'. It helps me to look at th poem anew.
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > Blue Magpie | 10-Oct-03/2:44 AM | Reply
You rule, thanks.
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