irishfolksuicide9 Oct 2003

don't like the rhyming, it seem arbitrary.

Other than that I like it. Reads like a kind of thesis in verse.

Glad you mentioned emerson

So many ace lines, my favourite is' To swim is so much harder than to float or clasp the nearest rock and say that this is now my truth' a nice little half rhyme too.

Not too didactic either which is quite a feat for a poem about truth