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Free verse № 67653

Sacrificial Virgin

by EAger to Offend

Member since 2003 · Posted 1 Oct 2003 · 2 comments

A foil dish is my crown and fat pools in my ear casting ants in tow from the front of the parade to the rear and out along the curving frown. The luscious bird hath finally flown with her brothers away from here. The ants were launched to feed the crow on chocolate and survival fear. Escaped sacrifice of great reknown means stones-a-poppin'for this clown.

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[n/a] deleted user 1-Oct-03/9:48 AM Reply
"The ants were launched to feed the crow
on chocolate and survival fear.
Escaped sacrifice of great reknown
means stones-a-poppin'for this clown."

Great word play!
[7] Quarton 3-Jul-04/10:21 AM Reply
Though a bit confusing, I liked this. One minor
suggestion; "The luscious bird hath finally flown"
Hath seems out of synch with the rest of the poem
and, IMO, it reads better with "has."