Blood

Member since 2003 · Posted 15 Sep 2003 · 1 comment

Blood dripping slowly, Down further in a stream; Flowing to the heavens Texturizing thy sight. A single hair Festers the wound, Defensive attack Against limitless beasts. Egotistical adrenaline boost Creating an incomprehensible sinister, One out stepping intangible boundaries. None can battle successfully Their own soul And the demons within Created by each other. Our spirituality breaks Our minds As it frugally invades all that remains. Now all that lives Suffers throughout its body, Weak faith being destroyed Because its purpose has no meaning. Bloody remains of a diverged soul Lost aimlessly in its world Controlled by fear.

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[4] Jill Stockinger 15-Sep-03/4:21 PM Reply

Didn't get the allusion to "thy sight" - and blood dripping down and then going "up" to heaven I found confusing- The first part- ending at the line "out stepping intangible boundaries" does not mesh well with rest of poem. Seem like 2 separate parts that do not go together well.