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Blood (Free verse) by Artemis745
Blood dripping slowly, Down further in a stream; Flowing to the heavens Texturizing thy sight. A single hair Festers the wound, Defensive attack Against limitless beasts. Egotistical adrenaline boost Creating an incomprehensible sinister, One out stepping intangible boundaries. None can battle successfully Their own soul And the demons within Created by each other. Our spirituality breaks Our minds As it frugally invades all that remains. Now all that lives Suffers throughout its body, Weak faith being destroyed Because its purpose has no meaning. Bloody remains of a diverged soul Lost aimlessly in its world Controlled by fear.

Up the ladder: systematic turbulence
Down the ladder: Coagulated Sentences

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.2
Weighted score: 4.904638
Overall Rank: 9827
Posted: September 15, 2003 6:32 AM PDT; Last modified: September 15, 2003 6:32 AM PDT
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[4] Jill Stockinger @ 68.165.173.193 | 15-Sep-03/4:21 PM | Reply
Didn't get the allusion to "thy sight" - and blood dripping down and then going "up" to heaven I found confusing- The first part- ending at the line "out stepping intangible boundaries" does not mesh well with rest of poem. Seem like 2 separate parts that do not go together well.
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