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Evicition notices & hang nails (Villanelle) by grendal
Three fine days to live and grow Take the veil from off your head Very toxic, and as big as your toe It wasn’t the fruit don't you know "OUT OF PARADISE ADAM & EVE", God said Three fine days to grow and live Shamed, and naked, forced to sew With cloths, their bodies fed Very toxic, and as big as your toe Red with white dots umbrella bow Now it's a dessert, no flower beds Three fine days to live and grow One bite & you will feel the flow Walking far, their soft feet dried & bled Very toxic and as big as your toe They start over as the ground tilled row This is Adam and Eve's story don't be mislead Three fine days to live and grow Very toxic, and as big as your toe.

Up the ladder: Ode to the Severn Bridge
Down the ladder: The Ladies and the Bum

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.6
Overall Rank: 2300
Posted: September 10, 2003 11:54 PM PDT; Last modified: September 10, 2003 11:54 PM PDT
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[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 12-Sep-03/3:44 PM | Reply
And eviction. but for your age attempting a vilanelle is brave and noteworthy, congratulations, but you spell for shit.
[n/a] grendal @ 24.126.113.154 | 12-Sep-03/6:40 PM | Reply
no,
I meant dessert.
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