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A Rose (Free verse) by LuckyJoe A rose could say more than I could ever,
All beauty be seen in perfection,
A red of flawless a ray,
To look within and become transparent,
As you look deeper you see loves of the past,
In a glance you see love yet to come,
This lets you know you are not to be alone,
Your soul finds happiness within,
This figure of perfection withers and falls peacefully back to earth,
But the message it leave; you remember:
"When you need me, come find me, cause every rose I am within."
Up the ladder:
To What Ends
Down the ladder:
The Postcard Shop
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Posted: August 17, 2003 7:42 PM PDT; Last modified: August 17, 2003 7:42 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.166884 Overall Rank: 4997 Comments:
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Lifeboatman @ 202.78.97.13
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17-Aug-03/7:51 PM
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cool.. 10
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<{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154
> Lifeboatman
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17-Aug-03/10:33 PM
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You have the poetic taste buds of a salamander high on newt.
Imagine if you will a serial killer with no set pattern at all, no motive, or vendetta, just a need to kill. Totally random and spontaneously inconsistent and unselective about picking victims. The perfect killing spree. The perfect murders. The perfect monster. <{GRENDAL}>, coming to a theater near you. Original story and screenplay by Jeremi Britt Handrinos. Directed by Aaron Arinofsky. Produced by Matt Damon and Ben Affleck. A Miramax Picture. GRENDAL, move over Ed Gein and Jack the Ripper. There's a new kid in town, and he's 'totally' killer.
skimming the surface, using the same old metaphors, roses, ice cream.. continue to dream, my sleeping beauty, till you find that your living a nightmare.. strike out motherfucker, be original.. or atleast put a new twist to old shit..
I might be striking out... but this and some of the others were wrote a long time ago. I wrote this hmmm 6 years ago when I was 14-15.
I'll post something new before to long. But as I said...most my work lately has felt and looked very forced...not worth posting.
be brave, be brave..
Ok first I love the 3rd line, not sure why yet but it has something to do with sound.
I see beauty in imperfection as well so we become members of different camps at line 2, not good. Then it just pretty much falls apart. "CAUSE" is not a word. Also that last line is just Lauren Bacall in Key Largo. 158 view(s)
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