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A Rose (Free verse) by LuckyJoe

A rose could say more than I could ever, All beauty be seen in perfection, A red of flawless a ray, To look within and become transparent, As you look deeper you see loves of the past, In a glance you see love yet to come, This lets you know you are not to be alone, Your soul finds happiness within, This figure of perfection withers and falls peacefully back to earth, But the message it leave; you remember: "When you need me, come find me, cause every rose I am within."

god'swife 18-Aug-03/10:54 AM
Ok first I love the 3rd line, not sure why yet but it has something to do with sound.

I see beauty in imperfection as well so we become members of different camps at line 2, not good.

Then it just pretty much falls apart.

"CAUSE" is not a word.

Also that last line is just Lauren Bacall in Key Largo.




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