twilight

by geewhiz1962

Member since 2003 · Posted 11 Aug 2003 · 4 comments

It's the end of day, time for reflection. How did I live it? could it be the last? Was there gusto? Was it an exception? Who did I touch? It went by so fast. Shall I wake at dawn without remorse? Will I dream great things, Inspiring scenes? Let me start new and follow a fresh course. Down time for me between day and dreams. This time is so crucial, it revitalizes me. It gives me hope, sparks imagination. People I need, things I want to see. Time just for me, what a sensation. This twilight of the day, closure of hours. Lonely, alone and sorting things out. Thinking it over and discovering my powers. Twilight 8/11/0

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[5] EAger to Offend 11-Aug-03/10:33 PM Reply

I appreciate the concept more than the execution. Up until "How did I live it," works well enough for an introduction. The body of it seems to lack spice.

Although I do like "discovering my powers."

[n/a] geewhiz1962 › EAger to Offend 12-Aug-03/5:23 PM Reply

Gee, should I be flattered or mad?

[7] richa 12-Aug-03/8:47 AM Reply

OK at least shows signs of wanting to get to grips with the subject

[6] http://mulberryfairy 12-Aug-03/9:52 AM Reply

This is the kind of end of the day meditation that my co-workers would love and make copies of and pass around the office. Didn't work as well as a poem, for me.