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Mistaken Battlefields (Lyric) by Brian Tiensvold
Going into battle with the sun on my side, the wounds you can hide but it cost. Like a meassage in a bottle we're tossed in the ocean, put into motion and lost. Wishing and watching our thoughts all collide and slowly be tide into ONE. With waves always washing the bottle away, the message is lost but not gone. Still floating and drifting, we're continualy shifting and changing the ways that we think... Still no one can see that when we can't agree to just dissagree, the bottle will break and the meassage will sink.

Down the ladder: twilight

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.2
Weighted score: 4.904638
Overall Rank: 9821
Posted: June 25, 2003 11:11 PM PDT; Last modified: June 25, 2003 11:11 PM PDT
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[8] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.147.3 | 25-Jun-03/11:20 PM | Reply
yes, multipersonality.. confusing and effective. lalala.
[6] Mr Pig @ 195.92.168.169 | 26-Jun-03/1:44 PM | Reply
Formulaic, yet I applaud the end it was impounding. 6
[3] Shardik @ 24.126.113.154 | 26-Jun-03/6:17 PM | Reply
Imagine someone reading this out loud with a lisp. lol.
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