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Field Of Surnames (Free verse) by Caducus
Soft green walls. Valleys of tin. Whistle of death. Shadows of life. White blades of steel, red blades of grass brown holsters rise from devils jaded. Second wave charged in a yellow rip-tide, fell on pale islands on khaki shores of froth. Screams held no accents but what of last whispers? Margaret, Ethel, M’am and why till silence brought the patient fly Hard grey walls. Valley’s of names. Whistling wind wooden platoons leave fleck paint shadows on dying Poppies.

Down the ladder: The Shadow's Dead

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.3333335
Weighted score: 4.9205313
Overall Rank: 9441
Posted: July 24, 2003 8:51 AM PDT; Last modified: June 15, 2006 5:21 AM PDT
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[6] amanda_dcosta @ 202.164.137.248 | 18-Jun-06/11:04 PM | Reply
Somehow I get the feeling of being in a cemetary.
[7] Ranger @ 86.142.240.156 | 22-Sep-06/3:18 AM | Reply
A lot of this has a strong rhythm of ONE-two-three-FOUR, very musical and very easy to read. Where it deviates, it gets more difficult.
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