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Free verse № 57319

Field Of Surnames

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Jul 2003 · Edited 15 Jun 2006 · 2 comments

Soft green walls. Valleys of tin. Whistle of death. Shadows of life. White blades of steel, red blades of grass brown holsters rise from devils jaded. Second wave charged in a yellow rip-tide, fell on pale islands on khaki shores of froth. Screams held no accents but what of last whispers? Margaret, Ethel, M’am and why till silence brought the patient fly Hard grey walls. Valley’s of names. Whistling wind wooden platoons leave fleck paint shadows on dying Poppies.

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[6] amanda_dcosta 18-Jun-06/11:04 PM Reply
Somehow I get the feeling of being in a cemetary.
[7] Ranger 22-Sep-06/3:18 AM Reply
A lot of this has a strong rhythm of ONE-two-three-FOUR, very musical and very easy to read. Where it deviates, it gets more difficult.