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Tomorrow (Free verse) by jude If for reasons, we must part.
Whether by fate, or whether by heart.
My love for you will never fade.
A place within my heart, you shall forever remain.
If tomorrow comes and I'm not there.
Know that I love you, know that I care.
But for this very moment, I love you.
Love you more today than all of my yesterdays.
So never have doubts about my feelings for you.
As my feelings for you are from my heart.
My feelings are all not of a masquerade...
But of all that are so true...true only to you.
My heart, my love, which I have given to you.
Forever yours...though we are not together, though we are now apart,
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Posted: July 22, 2003 6:01 PM PDT; Last modified: July 22, 2003 6:01 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.6926384 Overall Rank: 12042 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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22-Jul-03/11:55 PM
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Fair.
u speak from your heart
... it's so generic tho
part and heart / fade and remain are always rhymed together. There is nothing remotely new here.
the way the poem swings at the end with altered rhyme is quite nice though
Although I am sure it is written from the heart and the subject is something most can relate to, it is full of cliches and over done rhymes. A nice thought, but not very catching.
the almost-rhymes and off-rhythms are very painful to me.
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