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Herne (Ode) by OneFingerAnswer
Walking in the wood In the night mists that autumn I saw him for myself In that boggy bottom Through brambles and in thickets, Dark golden yellows, greens, and browns, Antlers blending with the branches, He rode through his grounds Softly sinking in the humus Shadowed discretely in gray Saddle and harness absent He rode upon his bay Slipping off the path Leaving no new trail He stepped into a halo Swallowed by a light soft and pale Like waters under the wind Somewhere upon that hill The single print to show his passing Slowly started to fill Walking in the wood In the night mists that autumn I saw him for myself In that boggy bottom

Up the ladder: Adam's Apple
Down the ladder: vacation

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.029801
Overall Rank: 7271
Posted: June 29, 2003 4:34 AM PDT; Last modified: June 29, 2003 2:01 PM PDT
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[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-Jun-03/1:55 PM | Reply
"In that boggy bottom plight"
"He rode upon the bay" Unless he owns it?
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3 > horus8 | 29-Jun-03/2:00 PM | Reply
I don't know what happened... I had a word after bottom.... I'll have to fix that

And a bay is a kind of horse. Auburn with a black mane I think.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > OneFingerAnswer | 29-Jun-03/5:08 PM | Reply
Oh, I see, well if it makes you feel better. My love life has been in the shitter, before I even knew where the shitter was. I'm fucking cursed. I hate this spinning mound of puppy planet. An I wish only for a polar shift of the mightiest porportions, and soon.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 9-Jul-03/2:35 AM | Reply
You have come a long way my friend, and you have earned every moment. GOLDEN QUE TIP awarde, for having more heart than a rapscallion poet deserves. I like how you only put in the commas and allowed your capitalization to accentuate starts and stops, a fine piece, very handsome.
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3 > horus8 | 9-Jul-03/2:52 AM | Reply
Rapscallion, eh? Heh, thanks. It means a lot coming from you. Thanks for the help along the way.
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