Help | About | Suggestions | Alms | Chat [0] | Users [0] | Log In | Join
 Search:
Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments   

What I Remember (Free verse) by leviathan
I heard the darkness declare from somewhere within all of this At last, the sun is dead I saw children crying for their Gods and their dreams But alas, both have abandoned and everything is dead I saw the wars that raged between virgin armies And a world that till death would not change I heard faint eulogies uttered calmly to no one before One by one souls not embraced fell painfully dead But mostly I remember a face Something between dreams and desire A diamond glistening beneath an exotic sun So vividly I remember an embrace Everything that dreams could not create Salvation summoned beneath a glistening sun Deliverance from the shackles conformed to the destinies of beautiful things that decay without guidance and devour like terror I remember the glistening souls of everything alive that used to be here The innocent children that played with diamonds inside their dreams and calmly asked God why the sun must eventually die.

Up the ladder: Tawn-tastic
Down the ladder: Midsummer, almost

You must be logged in to leave comments. Vote:

Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
 GraphVotes
10  .. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 20
.. 00
.. 20
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 00
.. 10

Arithmetic Mean: 4.8
Weighted score: 4.9761596
Overall Rank: 8327
Posted: June 15, 2003 4:57 PM PDT; Last modified: June 15, 2003 4:57 PM PDT
View voting details
Comments:
[7] richa @ 81.86.235.232 | 10-Jul-03/4:09 AM | Reply
varied selection of words and I like your verse structure. However some of the imagery doesn't really lure me into the poem and I think more basic elements of language would help
[7] richa @ 81.86.235.232 | 10-Jul-03/4:09 AM | Reply
varied selection of words and I like your verse structure. However some of the imagery doesn't really lure me into the poem and I think more basic elements of language would help
[7] richa @ 81.86.235.232 | 10-Jul-03/4:09 AM | Reply
varied selection of words and I like your verse structure. However some of the imagery doesn't really lure me into the poem and I think more basic elements of language would help
127 view(s)




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001