Whispering Water

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Jul 2002 · 2 comments

slightly smooth and pretty, while the water undulates around me... cool and comforting, while I splash and shout out loud... silky and soft, while I slide through it towards him... whispering around my skin, while I hug myself briefly... the air chills me, while I see him watching me... gliding towards him while the moon is full... holding each other, while the water whisper's our names into the silence around us... ***April 20th, 2002***

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[8] mikeyh53581 25-Jul-02/7:50 PM Reply

I really liked this one... wanted to thank you for commenting on mine, too... I added one today..

[n/a] poetandknowit 14-Aug-02/9:13 AM Reply

What is it with all the ellipsoidal use? Are you hanging with jangle jack? A line break is a sufficient pause I think. The...gives more of an impression of tapering off into infinity. The poem reminds me of panty hose for some reason.