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Whispering Water (Free verse) by forestchild7

slightly smooth and pretty, while the water undulates around me... cool and comforting, while I splash and shout out loud... silky and soft, while I slide through it towards him... whispering around my skin, while I hug myself briefly... the air chills me, while I see him watching me... gliding towards him while the moon is full... holding each other, while the water whisper's our names into the silence around us... ***April 20th, 2002***

poetandknowit 14-Aug-02/9:13 AM
What is it with all the ellipsoidal use? Are you hanging with jangle jack? A line break is a sufficient pause I think. The...gives more of an impression of tapering off into infinity. The poem reminds me of panty hose for some reason.




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