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Departing (Free verse) by scornofangels Dance slowly my love
this may be our last.
Don't blink, don't look away.
Just breathe.
Let our memories comfort you
on lonely nights.
Let me be your lullaby.
We'll meet again,
doubt it not.
I promise we'll be together
forever.
Hold me closer.
Let your heart beat with mine.
Our song is slowly ending,
my story's almost told.
Do you remember when we met?
Will you remember when I'll leave?
I'll never forget either,
and all else in between.
Let's move in sync
one last time.
Whisper me your dreams
again.
And with my last breath
I love you.
Up the ladder:
Six weeks on the road or "Drained"
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Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 2.25
Posted: March 10, 2003 9:55 AM PST; Last modified: March 10, 2003 9:55 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.672192 Overall Rank: 12202 Comments:
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OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3
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11-Mar-03/1:59 AM
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Ahh.. someone gave you the classic "I'm a dick so I'll vote 0 with no reasoning." vote. I liked it though. Sad but determined not to be. Fatalism without resignation. 6.
why is the language in this so arcane? the poem would be much more accessible if it were more vernacular, or, if you were trying to make it sound like a classic Romantic poem, if you stayed with formal usage. I suspect you got the zero becuse you didn't make up your mind.
i won't vote until it's finished. if this is finished, i'll not vote. 90 view(s)
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