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A Life Short-lived (Free verse) by WHeYe
Weakness, I lay in pools of... ...my own blood streaked across my forearm- so grotesque like porcelain -made fragile by your Weakness; ...your water-shaddow eyes contract to tiny pinpoints within paralleling mirrors- such spirals, like empathy almost -I stare at you infinite, and you clutch me frantic: 'Where is the...!' Weakness? You; target of ...my attempted heroism Mad with medicine recieved by you- So I told you, like irony -Cut for drug for everytime I let you down three in all One for Birth: that's weed from Birth srung Two for Life: that's speed so briefly here, then Three for Weakness. ...Ecstacy My soul released through three open windows Much relief, like sleep -Your soul released from Birth of facinations Life of quick exchanges Weakness for sale a life short-lived.

Down the ladder: Scruffles

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.8
Weighted score: 4.8569565
Overall Rank: 10465
Posted: March 4, 2003 4:19 PM PST; Last modified: March 4, 2003 4:19 PM PST
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[10] emeraldeyes @ 198.247.178.137 | 4-Mar-03/5:27 PM | Reply
i want to thank you, mysterious one, for your comment on my entry...your poetic talents far surpass mine! this poem paints an even clearer picture itself...but i eagerly welcome you to analyze my poetry whenever you'd like! take care.
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