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all the eyes are on (Lyric) by crin
i feel trapped here i need repair take this poison away touch me and absorb it am i paranoid crowds full of androids do they all communicate whispers i can not decipher they cause me pain but all my wounds are self-inflicted this is a strain picking at my seams scissors cut thread and suddenly i'm in pieces all the telephones ring i know they're talking about me i can't wait for the spring when all the flowers grow tall enough to hide me i can't think but i think they're after me i've seen them all somewhere someplace their faces maybe in a dream i catch them in shiny surfaces showing devil horns reflecting glints of evil all the eyes are on

Up the ladder: Morning on Galapados
Down the ladder: INDECENCY

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5622
Posted: January 10, 2003 9:48 PM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2003 9:48 PM PST
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[7]... anonymous @ 24.112.224.232 | 11-Jan-03/8:07 AM | Reply
shows promise. I like "when all the flowers grow
tall enough to hide me"
and the last stanza works for me. Rock on.
[6] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.97 | 11-Jan-03/8:11 AM | Reply
I love your original use of "android" to rhyme with "paranoid". Are you a pro? You should get this published! 6/10!!
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