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hide (Free verse) by sir_heff I cant pay my bail
when i start to fail
then i try to hide
the feelings inside
why do i hide?
why dont i just try?
It could'nt hurt
but i feel like dirt
it wouldnt be worse
if i was in a hurst
why am i a loser?
why cant i be cooler?
but mabye i am
and mabye i can
I'll try not to hide
the person inside
i've opened my eyes
i will try to abide
to the rules of my life
use the tools of my mind
to get you to be mine.
Up the ladder:
Fetish.
Down the ladder:
oh it hurt so much
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Posted: January 8, 2003 9:34 AM PST; Last modified: January 8, 2003 9:34 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.179294 Overall Rank: 4812 Comments:
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BleedingRose @ 65.172.117.1
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24-Apr-03/7:12 AM
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I like the theme. BTW hurst = hearse. Only reason for semi-low score was that im not too big a fan of the "every-line-ryhmes-with-the-next" format.
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