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I cant pay my bail when i start to fail then i try to hide the feelings inside why do i hide? why dont i just try? It could'nt hurt but i feel like dirt it wouldnt be worse if i was in a hurst why am i a loser? why cant i be cooler? but mabye i am and mabye i can I'll try not to hide the person inside i've opened my eyes i will try to abide to the rules of my life use the tools of my mind to get you to be mine.

BleedingRose 24-Apr-03/7:12 AM
I like the theme. BTW hurst = hearse. Only reason for semi-low score was that im not too big a fan of the "every-line-ryhmes-with-the-next" format.




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