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Exiting Shadows

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Jan 2003 · Edited 21 Mar 2003 · 6 comments

In Shadows, only those awake forever survive. You consider forever after death is a long time to be alive. Feathers fall and ignite an inch beyond the flame, Demons call as Angels fall, Shadow and light becomes the same. In shadows sleep could endanger your soul. Sometimes the weak succumb to a stranger, And once they trust demons with aura's, Possesion takes control, In a chorus of glorious choirs that strip your flesh in fires, In shadows of Angels demons are liars, That prey on humans couting stigmata. Death comes to all messiahs, I escaped hell by watching atrocities, Numb to the pain of screams, And because I never slept, My soul was kept burning alive in the furnace of dreams.

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6 comments

[9] Ranger 6-Jan-03/2:24 AM Reply
Oh yes..."In a chorus of glorious choirs that strip your flesh in fires", what a line...I'll be saying that all day.
Great poem! 9
[10] Nikai 6-Jan-03/3:35 AM Reply
There is something hauntingly beautiful about the lines that you used. All those pretty words - It fires up the imagination.
[9] DewDrop 6-Jan-03/5:38 AM Reply
You paint fire and hell on a canvas
of black.

Let down only by repetition of "forever", "demons" and "Shadows"

Do not think me disingenuous, I enjoyed the indulgence.
[10] Blindproject217 21-Mar-03/12:30 PM Reply
great poem, 10
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 21-Mar-03/1:03 PM Reply
Cliche done with class. Very well painted words Caducus. -10-
[5] daniella 21-Mar-03/8:05 PM Reply
dove stai beatricce???