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Haffner's Mill (Free verse) by powerline
Old buildings do cry their walls forever sulking, in what used to be the center of town Longing, for one more knock at the front door or just one more sale, at the register's feet So where have the builders gone? The ones that poured their hearts and worked their hands, building and building brick by brick And when the largest storm charged from the west they left their souls to die, for years and years inside buildings that cry

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.2
Weighted score: 4.904638
Overall Rank: 9817
Posted: December 31, 2002 1:33 PM PST; Last modified: December 31, 2002 1:33 PM PST
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[8] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.208.106 | 31-Dec-02/3:34 PM | Reply
Dude, this is seriously good. I have something about a building that has yet to go past scrbbled notes. Thank you for the inspiration.
[1] Tintagiles @ 198.164.251.51 | 31-Dec-02/10:17 PM | Reply
Nice idea, badly done.
[n/a] powerline @ 141.154.247.188 > Tintagiles | 1-Jan-03/7:02 AM | Reply
Thanks for the comment Tintagiles....care to elaborate on what is bringing this poem down? The form?
[8] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.72 | 1-Jan-03/8:08 AM | Reply
I particularly like the last stanza. It tells me the storm was a financial or political storm or a mass of people. Not horrible weather. I picture an old church or building with gargoyles. I dinged you two for the "sale".
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