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The beggar in me (Free verse) by dilips_10
I see in you the eyes of mine. Helpless and life weathered. But a grim resolve to breathe - To strive to stay. That twinkle in your milky gaze Shows patience and failures; That calm in your composure Misconstrues detachment as humiliation; That silence in your stillness Mistakes frivolity as insanity; And as I see you, I see in you the eyes of mine. With that begging bowl, you sit With eyes of mine I see me no other than you. With nothing in my mind But your company for comfort; With nothing to talk But for all our mute talk; With a view to stare As we breathe in unison; I sit for moments with you ripe life, Satiating the beggar in me - On this slab where you dwell And as I move on, I see in you the eyes of mine

Up the ladder: Random
Down the ladder: cake

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.2
Weighted score: 5.1
Overall Rank: 6054
Posted: June 27, 2002 1:40 PM PDT; Last modified: June 27, 2002 1:40 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] forestchild7 @ 216.77.209.45 | 9-Jul-02/3:38 PM | Reply
interesting concept... once wrote a poem based on a very similiar idea... good job...
[8] Jill Stockinger @ 209.162.37.68 | 14-Jul-02/2:58 PM | Reply
I liked it.
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