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For the boyfriend I don't have (Free verse) by ~incarnate~ To kiss him is to surrender,
To laugh with him a lasting memory
Blurred not by time
Dispersed like steam
his hands on me
Speak languages only my soul knows
Here I could spend eternity.
Up the ladder:
REALITY
Down the ladder:
Mother
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Posted: December 11, 2002 9:34 AM PST; Last modified: December 11, 2002 1:17 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.820706 Overall Rank: 10912 Comments:
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Caducus @ 62.105.88.10
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11-Dec-02/9:37 AM
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Beautiful, something nice to go home on, i wrote one like this once called 'When I meet my love' there is something very romantic and mystical in pre conception of a paragon like a soul mate, good luck in your search hope you got the patience you'll need it. *8*
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~incarnate~ @ 198.146.135.219
> Caducus
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11-Dec-02/10:09 AM
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thanks! And oh, yeah, I will need the luck!
How optimistically sweet
Alright dear this isn't half bad you just have to get rid of the things that make it sound childish.
To kiss him is to surrender. To laugh with him, a lasting memory Blurred not by time. Vanishing like steam His hands on me Speak languages Only my soul knows. here I could spend eternity. good luck with the writing.
Thank you
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