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For the boyfriend I don't have
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Free verse
) by
~incarnate~
To kiss him is to surrender, To laugh with him a lasting memory Blurred not by time Dispersed like steam his hands on me Speak languages only my soul knows Here I could spend eternity.
god'swife
11-Dec-02/11:29 AM
Alright dear this isn't half bad you just have to get rid of the things that make it sound childish.
To kiss him is to surrender.
To laugh with him, a lasting memory
Blurred not by time.
Vanishing like steam
His hands on me
Speak languages
Only my soul knows.
here I could spend eternity.
good luck with the writing.
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