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A Sonnet For Santa Claus, Who Hates Jesus, But Likes When You Buy Things (Sonnet) by snacktime
With the foulest blasphemy on my lips (It was you above King David's city), While snow does your old countenance eclipse, My winter's heart stirs in you naught but pity. Oh, you need not wield a weapon of cold, Nor keep your cruel features marbled and iced, No fetters needed, for your speech is bold As your word denies the birth of Lord-Christ. From your frozen mouth drop secrets to keep, And your unlovely hands trace afoul of cheer, Your eyes, mirror'd in new December deep, No tears from you, should Yuletide disappear. Yet in raiment of red your body is dressed, And within nothing, you find you are blessed.

Up the ladder: Our New Tongue
Down the ladder: Sleep Well

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.9411764
Weighted score: 5.8289857
Overall Rank: 1632
Posted: December 10, 2002 9:54 PM PST; Last modified: December 10, 2002 9:54 PM PST
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Comments:
[8] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 11-Dec-02/2:09 AM | Reply
Not bad, although I was expecting something more humourous from the title...
[8] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.50 | 11-Dec-02/5:25 AM | Reply
humbug. i celebrate my birth rather than christ's this time of year. fine poem, though.
[7] andrewjthomas @ 192.150.10.150 | 5-May-03/10:37 AM | Reply
pretty interesting poem, structurally sound, but i think your iambic meter could use a little work
i liked it, but it does feel a bit preachy (but maybe that's what you were going for?)
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Aug-03/11:36 AM | Reply
Satan Claws 8 Hayzeus 4 brakefeast.
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