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stifled (Free verse) by crin i loved you
but nobody will ever know
i wanted to tell the world
but nobody will ever know
now you won't hear another word
i loved you
but now you'll never know
i held my breath
i held your breath
Up the ladder:
just another punk song
Down the ladder:
Antiquity
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Posted: December 9, 2002 11:12 PM PST; Last modified: December 9, 2002 11:12 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5618 Comments:
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god'swife @ 209.178.179.41
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10-Dec-02/12:09 AM
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Are you a serial killer? Is this a confession?
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crin @ 68.55.16.32
> god'swife
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10-Dec-02/10:38 PM
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godd's wife, no serial killer here, but mayde i've just been watching too many movies or something. just a clue, "now you won't hear another word" doesn't mean she won't be able to hear me, but just that i won't be telling her i love her anymore.
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crin @ 68.55.16.32
> god'swife
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10-Dec-02/10:40 PM
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god's wife, no serial killer here. maybe i've been watching too many movies. just a clue, i am the one feeling "stifled" here.
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god'swife @ 209.179.136.205
> crin
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10-Dec-02/11:05 PM
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"i held your breath" sounds like murder, especially when preceded by "nobody will ever know" and "now you won't hear..." Come on 'fess up, you did it.
This is quite disturbing, and I really dont know how to feel about it, a true mindfucker of a poem, i cant say its bad or good but i wanna know what gods wife whats to know, do you dig bundy?
i really consider it a compliment that you called this a mindfuck. thank you.:)
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