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I Hear My Name Called Again and Again (Free verse) by abbaslittleclingon
I hear my name called again and again by one maybe two or three beckoning persistently,gentle breeze unfeinged soothing me the waves alsso at shore join the calls pleading and crying creating an ache to penetrate walls sweet,urgent,searing disolving my will and body of substance as I follow the sound of hope in the distance becoming hollow I search and search and weep for the unsearchable tired and drained I long for leep now irristable

Up the ladder: ...
Down the ladder: The Child

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.25
Weighted score: 4.672192
Overall Rank: 12192
Posted: November 17, 2002 4:54 PM PST; Last modified: November 17, 2002 4:54 PM PST
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[2] god'swife @ 209.178.177.153 | 18-Nov-02/1:35 PM | Reply
Typos a plenty. Not to mention searing waves??? I believe you lifted this from some silent movie.
[n/a] abbaslittleclingon @ 24.67.253.204 > god'swife | 19-Nov-02/1:35 PM | Reply
god'swife,
You must feel incredibly jealous of my work to be always attacking it so viciously.
[2] god'swife @ 209.179.138.120 > abbaslittleclingon | 19-Nov-02/3:46 PM | Reply
How on earht is my comment a vicious attack? You mis-spelled many words, and searing waves make little to no sense. May b u shud go 2 skewl. Get that ed-u-k-shun u so unjustlee mist owut on.
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